❌ Low-Band Sample (4.0)

Academic Writing Task 1 — Bar Chart
Task: Population growth in three cities from 1990 to 2010

➖➖➖➖➖➖

✍️ Answer Example:

“The chart show population in three cities. City A have most people. City C is less. From 1990 to 2010, all cities go up. City A going up more fast. The people number in City B is small but more in 2010. City C is slow growing. Chart is easy to understand.”

➖➖➖➖➖➖

❗️ Error Analysis — Why it’s Band 4.0

➖➖➖➖➖➖

📌 1. Task Achievement — Band 4

✅ Problems:
• No overview (missing overall trends or comparisons)
• Doesn’t group or explain data logically
• Some information is repeated or unclear

✅ To improve: Add a clear summary and make comparisons with numbers.

➖➖➖➖➖➖

📌 2. Coherence & Cohesion — Band 4

✅ Problems:
• Sentences are short, choppy, and poorly connected
• No real use of linking devices

❌ Examples:
• “City A have most people. City C is less.”

✅ To improve: Use connectors like while, compared to, overall, in contrast

➖➖➖➖➖➖

📌 3. Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

✅ Problems:
• Very basic vocabulary: go up, more fast, easy to understand
• Repetition of common words: city, people, more
• No variety, no topic-specific language

✅ To improve: Learn academic phrases like experienced a rise, significant increase, moderate growth

➖➖➖➖➖➖

📌 4. Grammatical Range & Accuracy — Band 3.5

✅ Problems:
• Frequent grammar errors:
– “chart show” → should be “chart shows”
– “City A have…” → should be “City A has…”
– “City A going up more fast” → incorrect comparative
• No complex sentences

✅ To improve: Practice sentence structure and subject-verb agreement. Add relative clauses or conditionals.

🔹 Improve your English with us! 🔹