🦩 Yet another way to avoid repetitions in an essay 🦩

Synonyms are one way to avoid repetitions (arguably, the worst one). Pronouns are another (sometimes not an option due to the danger of unclear referencing). What's left?

📝 Here is a piece of an IELTS essay written by a student:

"Being active Internet users, young people spend long hours online on a regular basis where they endlessly come across attractive images of celebrities. Representatives of the younger generation consume this information eagerly as it is visual and does not require much cognitive effort. As a direct consequence of this, the youth know every detail of international stars’ biographies, (...)"

It is noticeable that the student relies on synonyms to paraphrase “young people,” but the result is a bit awkward.

So, yet another way (arguably, the best one) to avoid a repetition is to change the sentence structure - in this specific case, we can change it so that we only need the same subject (= young people) once.

📝 My rewrite of the first two sentences:

“Being active internet users, young people come across information about celebrities on a regular basis, consuming it eagerly as it is visually appealing and does not require much cognitive effort.”

Other rewrites? Share in the comments.