🦋 Cohesion in writing a successful grant application 🦋

There isn't much else I love more than working on writing. 💜

Today, a fellow teacher and I looked at her application essays for a big prestigious grant. Clearly, cohesion came up - there is no writing without it. But it can work slightly differently in writing that is not exam writing.

Here is an example of "before-after."

📝 Before: cohesion lacking

"One of my instructors during the CELTA course kept mentioning tirelessly: “Do not teach the lesson plan you wrote. Teach your students.” To be honest, what he meant didn’t come to me immediately. Now I’m certain he was talking about building a partnership."

📝 After: improved cohesion

"One of my instructors during the CELTA course kept repeating tirelessly: “Do not teach the lesson plan you wrote. Teach your students.” I didn't understand what he meant back then. But now I do – he was talking about building a partnership."

What can be more enjoyable than helping someone succeed in their application by adding cohesion to their essay? 💜