In my first IELTS class today, I put these two conclusions written by my students in front of the group's eyes and said, "Look. These are simply great. Let's identify why."
I rarely say that. But do do give credit when credit is due. The conclusions below are excellent. They just are. As you read, try to understand why.
1️⃣ "To conclude, although non-conventional medicine appeals to many people, I believe this is a negative trend due to the threat it poses to a sick individual’s health and due to additional expenditures it incurs."
2️⃣ "In conclusion, turning to alternative medicine is neither safe nor economiсal. The former is explained by the absence of trustworthy scientific research and evidence, while the latter is illustrated by the exorbitant prices for different treatments. Thus, both of these reasons make the trend negative."
Here is why:
1️⃣ Each conclusion summarizes the respective essay so well you don't even need to read the whole thing to understand what it is about.
2️⃣ The arguments are united into one beautiful, coherent whole with the help of parallelism and other cohesive devices (which ones? share in the comments).
Pure beauty, isn't it?