📝 Overuse of "and." Sequel II. 📝

I have already written a couple of posts about it, but I feel compelled to write one more (and will probably keep writing them on a regular basis because it's what I see on a regular basis).

Look at the sentence below. It has four "and"s! That's too many.

🗒 Student's original sentence:

"The former determines our talents and looks, which play a significant role in our ability to experience success, in that talents permit us to hone the necessary skills easier and faster and good looks endear us to others and thus can smooth our interactions with them."

🗒 My re-write:

"The former determines our talents and looks, which play a significant role in our ability to experience success, in that talents permit us to hone the necessary skills faster, while good looks endear us to others, thus smoothing our interactions with them."

The problem with excessive use of "and" is not just that the result is an awkward and/or lengthy sentence. It's that the sentence is hard to process because there are simply too many elements in it (not to mention the lack of meaningful connections between them).

🗒 Do you have an alternative rewrite of the student's sentence above? Share in the comments.