📝 Overuse of "and." Sequel. 📝

I've already written about the overuse of the conjunction "and" in a post before the previous one. In that post, the problem was packing too many concepts into one sentence. However, overuse of "and" can have a different root cause.

🗒 Here is a paragraph written by a student:

"Eating unhealthy food once, people crave for more, [1] and abstinence from ultra processed food becomes a challenging task. On top of that, this tempting food can be easily purchased in any store [2] and this is the second reason for its popularity. There are no laws or rules which regulate the sales of harmful products or their advertisement and layout in stores. Businesses take advantage of this lack of regulations, [3] and, in their advertisements, they attract the attention of customers to the benefits of this food, while disregarding any information concerning its harm."

Here, the problem is different - the student uses "and" to introduce a new sentence. Doing so with the help of "and" is weak as this conjunction does not connect ideas in a meaningful way.

🗒 Fixes:

1️⃣ In the first case, the clauses have a "cause-effect" connection, so why don't we use "so"? ""Eating unhealthy food once, people crave for more, so abstinence from ultra processed food becomes a challenging task"

2️⃣ "And this is" is better of as "which." "On top of that, this tempting food can be easily purchased in any store, which is the second reason for its popularity"

3️⃣ Give it a shot in the comments?