📝 A common mistake in writing 📝

Here is a piece of a student's writing. Try to notice what is off.

📝 "Being genuinely interested in people around you is actually more important in communication than being interested in oneself. If a person is curious, he or she is eager to listen to another person and support them."

The problem is the inconsistency in subjects / objects / agents. I'll put them in bold for you to notice:

📝 "Being genuinely interested in people around you is actually more important in communication than being interested in oneself. If a person is curious, he or she is eager to listen to another person and support them."

How can we change that?

1️⃣ The simplest solution is to use "you" everywhere:

"Being genuinely interested in people around you is actually more important in communication than being interested in yourself. If you are curious, you are eager to listen to another person and support them."

Now the piece is beautifully consistent, but what if we can't use "you" because of the register? It is on the informal side after all.

2️⃣ The solution many people suggest immediately is using "one" throughout:

"Being genuinely interested in people around one is actually more important in communication than being interested in oneself. If one is curious, one is eager to listen to another person and support them."

But now the piece is awkward and too formal. Is there a better solution?

3️⃣ The best solution is to get rid of some if the pronouns at all - not with the help of synonyms though. Look:

"Being genuinely interested in those around is actually more important in communication than being self-centered and self-absorbed. A curious person is eager to listen to others and support them."

The third solution is by far the most elegant. Mind your consistency and see if you really need all those "you/one/people/person."